Nice! I particularly like the art style and music ^^ Text could use polish here and there. Some suggestions:
"Please find out who killed Foxy Detective" -> "Please find out who killed Foxy, Detective!"
The orig was missing a comma, making it sound like the word "Foxy" was being used as an adjective to describe "detective". It was also missing an exclamation mark (or if you'd prefer, a period) at the end.
You know the part in the notepad about Foxy bringing strange items? I think it'd be best to have that in its own bullet point.
"Welcome detective, I'm glad that you got to our little village so quickly." -> "Welcome, detective. I'm glad that you have arrived at our little village so quickly."
Felt it'd be best to split this in two. It felt like the orig was using "Welcome" as an adjective for "detective".
Very cute and intriguing. I can't seem to interact with the crime scene though and I think I've chatted to all the critters. Who killed Foxy?! I must know!
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Nice! I particularly like the art style and music ^^ Text could use polish here and there. Some suggestions:
Very cute and intriguing. I can't seem to interact with the crime scene though and I think I've chatted to all the critters. Who killed Foxy?! I must know!
Cute style! I'm a little confused about what to do, or why I'm rolling dice. Maybe you could add some hints on the page to guide a noob like me!